Nearby a barbershop in Vallejo, CA a fight broke out in front of a marijuana dispensary in the 1900 block of Broadway. The fight started inside of the barbershop but ended in front of the marijuana store. Many shell casings were found on the ground, but when the police arrived to the crime scene there were no victims any where to be found. The police questioned a few people, some gave information, and some were not willing to say anything. All who spoke to the police had a different story to tell from one another. Some said the victims fled in a van, others said they fled on their feet. A citizen said that as he and his wife were leaving a local store, a bullet whizzed across his head.
It amazes me that the police are hired to protect and serve the community, yet when something happens in the community they are absolutely nowhere to be found until everything has already happened. It does not say whether or not the police showed up immediately, but in reading the article, it can seems that the police did not show up in a timely manner or maybe the suspects would have been caught. Surprisingly, nobody was hurt in this fight that escalated into gun fire. I believe that if more people would speak up on the activities that take place in the community, then it would be less violent. Most criminals would think before they commited a crime in fear of a potential witness telling the police exactly what happened. A few people may say that you would now be labeled as a snitch but to have a safer environment that we all can live in, helping the police will benefit EVERYONE
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I agree wit your statement prior to your topic. If you are protecting innocent people you should not be considered a snitch because that could've you and I am sure you would want someone to speak up on your behalf(not directed toward you). As far as corrections, I would say in your first sentence add a comma after CA, and also in your forth sentence in the first paragraph you should add some type of punctuation between people and some. Great job this was a great topic.
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ReplyDeleteThis is a great topic to write about. I really like this because it's very controversial in urban neighborhoods. I like what you said about snitches because you bring up a good point. If you don't snitch, then danger resides, but if you do snitch, danger subsides. As far as feedback goes, there are minor punctuation errors like places you can add commas and also in the fourth line of the second paragraph, you wrote, "...it can appear that the police did not show up in a timely manner or maybe the victims would have been caught." In this context, I believe you are referring to suspects, because had there been victims to the shooting, they'd most likely be on the ground bleeding out. Hopefully this helped for you.
Starsean, excellent topic choice. It is indeed heartbreaking that those who are supposed to protect us have become the ones who we are in fear of reaching out to. Would love to hear your thoughts on how society can go about changing this thought process, and how we can help protect our citizens from retaliation.
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